cssw :: logline

23 Jun

When villagers threaten to put them in the mission in town, Crow and her band of orphaned girls must work harder than ever to keep their home in the Spirit Woods. But the haunted forest lets a group of no-good boys invade, and a white bear is stalking the camp, causing the girls to wonder if the home they’re fighting so hard to save will keep them… or kill them.

 

That’s my new logline for CROW AND THE SECRETS OF THE SPIRIT WOODS.

Loglines suck to write. It’s a struggle to decide which points to show and which to leave out. For example, the girls are facing more problems in the woods than just boys and bears. For starters, a lack of supplies. But a bear that is white and also stalking seems a bit more exciting than a lack of salt and horse feed, so in I put it while the supply issue wasn’t mentioned.

I think fantasy is particularly difficult to have to sum up. You create an entire world over the space of hundreds of pages, and to try and squeeze it down into something that doesn’t sound utterly ridiculous is tricky. When people ask me what my novel is about, I become something akin to a train wreck.

Need an example?

“Well, there are these girls, and they live in this forest that is haunted, only it’s not really haunted so much as it is just… alive. And, well, they start having all these problems, and there’s this bear that keeps leaving them piles of teeth- like… animal teeth, you know?- and… and…”

It’s never pretty. I need to work on my talking skills, you guys.

Anyway, I don’t know how I feel about my new logline. I’m going to let it sit and take another look at it in a week or so.

Here is the blog post I used to help me form it.

Next up will be an elevator pitch 🙂

Okay, now I have to know something: when people ask you what your story is about, do you nail it or flub it?

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2 Responses to “cssw :: logline”

  1. Audrey June 24, 2014 at 1:13 pm #

    I think it sounds great!! Obviously, I don’t know the whole story like you do, but the logline has me wanting more!

  2. Heather S. June 27, 2014 at 12:50 pm #

    Just having fun here (feel free to use)… “When villagers threaten to put Crow and her band of orphaned girls in the town mission, they must work harder than ever to preserve their home in the Spirit Woods. While that is hard enough, the peculiar forest allows a group of dodgy boys to invade and is home to a silvery bear that stalks the camp. The girls begin to wonder if the home they’re fighting so hard to save will keep them… or kill them.”

    This book sounds magical!!!! I’m sure it’s been driving you nuts 🙂

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